The Failed Tale of Robin Dale
Deleted Scenes of Part Two - Preludes to a Plot
By Chip Chap
Deleted scenes from the Failed Tale of Robin Dale
Hello everyone, this is basically meant to be a humorous and enjoyable story told in the style that Monterey Jack would tell it. Of course, my writing style is a bit chaotic (I'll come up with an idea, run for it a little bit, get stuck on some little detail and try something different to fit in it's place.) so there are a lot of things that didn't appear in this chapter. But many of those things do have some neat jokes in them so I decided to post them here. What I would like you to do is tell me what you think of them.
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King Geegaw's old friend
This scene is pretty straightforward, it introduced Geegaw as the King, it
introduced the problem and got the plot underway, I cut it because I just didn't
think it was funny.
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Monterey (sitting down):
All right then. Now, while Robin Dale and his Merry Men were trying to level
out the Nottingspam economy, the wise and noble King of England received a message
from a far away land...
INT: Hackwrench Castle - The throne room - Day
The room is immense and beautiful. Majestic marble pillars hold up the ceiling, grand paintings line the walls depicting scenic views of the many cities and villages the King rules over. A long red carpet leads from the large entrance to platform on which three thrones sit. Everything is spotlessly clean and shines brilliantly.
Geegaw Hackwrench enters through the doorway clad in an elegant robe and wearing a golden crown. He makes his way up the carpet to the throne. Mickey Mouse dressed as a royal adviser enters through the same door and quickly catches up with him.
Advisor Mickey:
Your Highness, I have received a message from the King of Samiam, he is having
second thoughts about your plan to build a trading colony on his coast.
King Geegaw:
That is to be expected, Mickey. The people of Samiam have been attacked many
times by those who wish to rob them of their land and recourses, but I believe
that our countries can become great allies if we can just prove to them that
we respect their ideals.
Geegaw reaches his throne and sits down, Mickey stands at attention at the base of the dais.
Advisor Mickey:
But Your Highness, these people are unimpressed with the goods we sell to them
and have repeatedly poked fun at our artistic masterpieces. I can see no way
with which we can win their trust.
King Geegaw:
Mickey, I am afraid that you may never understand this, but you can not win
peoples hearts merely through gifts and entertaining stories. You must learn
to truly care for them and let them know that.
Geegaw holds his head in a thoughtful position and immediately brightens up.
King Geegaw:
Of course! If I wish to show the King of Samiam that I mean only peace to his
people, I should invite him to visit my country as a guest. Once he sees how
peaceful and just our land is he will surely know that we harbor only good intentions
toward him and his people.
Advisor Mickey:
Splendid idea, Your Majesty! It is sure to work!
Geegaw gets up from his throne and heads for the door.
King Geegaw:
Mickey, have the Singing Dolphin stocked with provisions and prepared for departure.
I will set sail for Samiam at dawn tomorrow.
Advisor Mickey:
But Your Highness! Surely you cannot travel all the way across the sea, the
people need your guidance and wisdom.
King Geegaw stops and ponders the situation.
King Geegaw:
Hmmm... you do have a point... I know! I’ll stay here and get everything
prepared for our guests while you cross the sea and invite the king.
Mickey almost looses his footing.
Advisor Mickey:
Wha...wha... what? Me go to talk to him? Well I am quite honored Your Majesty,
but...
King Geegaw:
Then it’s settled! I’ll write up the invitation and get this place
set up for our guests while you make sure that Captain Killjoy gets the ship
ready for your departure.
Geegaw exits the room while Mickey stands in shock. After a few moments Mickey
pulls himself together and leaves the room.
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Princess Gadget cast as Prince John
I origionally thought of this version because I wasn't sure if Geegaw should
really be given screen time (especially when I'm the author) so I had Geegaw
off somewhere (like Samiam) and Gadget was put on the throne, however she isn't
very experienced with leading a country and soon an evil guy (either Ratigan
or Mickey Mouse) begins to seize control and starts ruling the country. I cut
this because I couldn't think of anything funny.
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Monterey (vo):
Now the King of this land was a very generous king who cared very much for his
people. He was a wise and noble King that was loved the rich history of his
family and spent every day of his life building a better future for his family
and his people...
The camera zooms out and begins searching around the room, behind the throne, around the pillars, a blue hand reaches out and lifts up the carpet and the camera checks underneath it. However, the King is nowhere to be found.
INT- Ranger HQ- Chip and Dale’s Bedroom- Night
Bink:
Where is the King?
Monterey (hesitantly):
Well, he’s um...
Bink:
Uncle Monty, if the King isn‘t on the throne where is he?
Monterey:
Well... The King took a trip... he’s out protecting the people of another
country because they need his help.
Bink (reassured):
Oh, that makes sense. But who’s ruling the kingdom now?
Monterey (thinks for a moment):
Oh, of course, the Princess is ruling the country in her Father’s place.
INT- Hackwrench Castle - The Throne Room- Day
Gadget is sitting on the throne with a dozen advisors standing around her waiting.
Gadget looks at the advisors, the advisors look at Gadget.
Princess Gadget (hesitantly):
Well umm... (addresses one of the advisors) how are things going?
Advisor:
Hominahominahominahominahomina!
Another advisor immediately gives him a swift bonk on the noggin and brings him back to reality.
Advisor (avoiding the glares his fellows are hiving him):
Well, everything is going just fine your highness.
Princess Gadget (relieved):
Oh, well that’s good.
Gadget relaxes on the throne, the advisors keep standing, one them starts looking at the floor, a few stifle yawns.
Princess Gadget (glancing around):
Umm... is there anything I should know about?
The advisors all look around at each other and shake their heads.
Advisors (shrugging):
Not really.
Princess Gadget (standing up):
Well in that case, I'm going to go get something to eat.
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Gadget: The Inventing Princess
This time, Gadget and Geegaw were a happy royal family and spent a lot of time
together. Gadget was mechanically minded and everything was great. I ditched
this because I couldn't think of any problems that Gadget wouldn't remedy with
just a few of her amazing inventions (I don't think it would have been as good,
since all the Rangers are scattered on completely different teams in this story).
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Monterey (vo):
Now the King of this land was an amazingly wise and noble King. He was brave
and valiant and would never hesitate to protect his family or his people even
if it meant putting himself in danger. He was proud of his heritage but never
hesitated to pave the way for the future. He was doubtlessly the greatest ruler
that the people had ever had...
The camera zooms in on the empty throne.
Bink (vo):
Where’s the King?
Monterey (vo):
Well... you see...
Suddenly Gadget drives into the throne room wearing a dress as she rides on a motorized tricycle, the hind wheels are spring powered and a large turn-key protrudes from the back.
Princess Gadget:
Whhheee!!
Gadget drives a few laps around the room and then Geegaw walks in wearing a robe and a crown.
King Geegaw (laughing):
Well that certainly is a fine contraption you have there Princess
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Chip Chap is talking:
So, what do you think?
Am I concentrating too much on adding jokes to my story?
Were any of my jokes even funny?
Are my character's interesting?
Does having Monterey tell the story help at all?
Is it just too darn short?
Remember, if I can get some honest input I can use it to make a better story.